The Official Writing Challenge
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07/29/16
This is very good. It flowed beautifully with great suspense. Only one red ink I can point out is in the chapter that starts with "Fifteen minutes...the map had come out," was unclear to me. Couldn't quite understand what you meant. Other than that, Great Job!
08/01/16
Your story had me feeling the woman's panic state. To engage my senses is good writing. Keep it up.
08/02/16
You did a good job of building suspense. I thought you were going down, except you were writing so you must make it okay.
08/02/16
It is surprising how quickly we forget the Lord's trusting arms when we panic. Good story, I enjoyed reading it!
Congratulations on ranking 4th in your level and 23 overall. Happy Dance!