The Official Writing Challenge
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04/09/15
I could hear the voice of the teenager come through. My unwed daughter was a little older than your MC but had two children so this gave me insight into how she was feeling at the time. I'm proud of her and through it she also gave her heart to the Lord. Thanks for sharing.
04/14/15
Great job building the tension and conflict - and nice ending - didn't seem too contrived. Well done.
04/14/15
Excellent story with an authentic tone throughout this well written piece.

I loved the ending...it was hopeful and left me with peace in knowing God was in control and no matter what, everything was going to be okay.

Well done!

God bless~
04/15/15
Good believable tone of voice. Honest thoughts of a teenager. Great ending. Best of luck in the Challenge!
04/15/15
Sounds just like a teen - very authentic voice.