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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Hum (06/06/13)
Amazing flying creatures that hum,
About the size of my own thumb,
Arrive at my backyard every spring time,
Hummingbirds humming so sublime.

Intelligent little hummers indeed,
Finding again the plants that feed,
Knowing each year where a flower had grown,
Guarding the site to make it their own.

Visiting a thousand flowers a day,
They drink up to eight times more than they weigh,
Wings fluttering two hundred times per second,
Make a hummer hungry I reckon.

Hummingbird colors flashing so bright,
Can also be hidden out of sight,
Iridescent coloring of a soap bubble,
Dulls at once with signs of trouble.

These are the tiniest birds of any,
Weighing not much more than a penny,
They can fly sixty miles per hour,
When not busy sipping from a flower.

Hummingbirds have excellent hearing,
Magnified vision for foes appearing,
Sadly most die in their first year of life,
Being so tiny makes for such strife.

There is a sanctuary near Olive Branch,
Sort of a glorified Hummingbird ranch,
Hundreds of flowers and feeders each year,
Where hummers can rest and nest without fear.

Flying to far regions south in the Fall,
Leaving the cold and hearing God's call,
Searching for flowers with fresh sweet blooms,
And sanctuaries with warmer rooms.

God must have smiled on such a creation,
Lending my eyes this fine recreation,
He stunningly fashioned this amazing hummer,
To bless my heart every spring and summer.
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harvestgal Ndaguba
06/13/13
I enjoyed reaading this lovely poem. Huming birds are one of God's lovely creations.
C D Swanson 
06/14/13
Oh my gosh...I loved this entire piece. The flow, the rythym, and the outstanding detail about the hummingbird. I LOVE hummingbirds, they're amazingly beautiful, delicate and so intriquing. So I enjoyed it all the more being the subject.

This will definitely warrant attention from the judges...you may be heading for masters very soon!

God bless~
C D Swanson 
06/14/13
Correction:

rhythm...oops, my fingers always forget the "h" lol.

Again, great job!

God bless~
Genia Gilbert
06/17/13
A hummingbird lover myself, I especially enjoyed this. Some of the facts you included were new to me, and I loved the rhythm and beauty. Good writing!
Andrea Van Ye
06/17/13
great imagery! thanks for sharing. i think that hummingbirds are an amazing creation and so fun to watch!
Sheldon Bass 
06/18/13
Wonderful poem for us bird lover's. The agile humming bird is indeed one of God's most amazing designs. This is one of those pieces that just makes me feel good. Thank You.
Ellen Carr 
06/18/13
What a lovely poem about humming birds. I have never seen a real-life humming bird but your descriptions made me almost 'see' them. They must indeed be one of God's wonderful creations.
Margaret Kearley
06/18/13
This is beautiful. I have learnt so much about humming birds from these lovely verses. Great scanning and rhymes, and I enjoyed such lines as 'Wings fluttering two hundred times per second,
Make a hummer hungry I reckon.' Lovely ending too. A super read.

Danielle King 
06/18/13
You have educated me with this lovely, descriptive poem. I now need to see a hummingbird for myself. They sound like amazing little creatures.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/18/13
This is really lovely. I have a friend who loves hummingbirds. I could see this on a plaque with the birds hovering on the outside border. The only red ink I have is I believe springtime is one word (but that may mess up the meter) You nailed the topic in a beautiful and vivid way!
Linda Berg
06/20/13
Hummingbirds are one of God's most delighful creations. When I watch them they give calm to my soul. Thank you for sharing all the details about them in a most amazing poem.