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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Weary (05/03/12)
Who is this wearisome soul?

She shuffles painfully out of bed as another day dawns
And caresses its ending more than its beginning;
She relentlessly borrows from yesterday’s fears
And distresses
And walks alone
Snared by solitary confinement while in open spaces
She bears a burden expected only to be carried by men,
Saddled upon many like her whose
Longing is to be wined and dined and revered.
She carts the scars of provocation and isolation.
See their manifestation though her eyes of longing;
Hear her sighs and gasps - exasperating;
Connect with her hungry heart of yearning.
When does her dream yet burst into beauty?
Her passions ignite serenely?
When does divine destiny replace senseless duty?
Should pillared tombstones serve as guardians to long lost love?
Should skeletal remains of desires,
Longed for, and hoped for in days of yore,
Die a thousand deaths
Before her final day of mourning comes?

She cries out, as with one last feeble breath
To the only One who truly cares and carries all burdens
And He bids her, “Draw near.”
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Dannie Hawley 
05/10/12
Very moving piece. Nice job.
Leola Ogle
05/10/12
I felt the emotion and longing of the MC's heart as I read this. Beautifully and powerfully written. Good job! God bless!
C D Swanson 
05/11/12
This was simply beautiful in on so many levels. Thank you for this poignant and touching entry.

God Bless~
Marina Rojas
05/13/12
This is very moving, it made me want to seek out the wearisome soul and hold her, hoping to comfort, and rejoicing when the King of Kings at last drew her near.

Good read. Intriguing.
Edmond Ng
05/15/12
A very well expressed piece. In Christ alone we can be set free to have Him carry for us such a load of burdens. Thanks for sharing this. Nicely written!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
05/16/12
This is really beautiful. I sense there is even more to these lines than I am able to grasp because poetry isn't my strongest suit. However, with what I did understand, it touched my heart. Life is a tiresome journey. Though I have had death phobias my entire life, I have no doubt when my time is at hand God will be with me and whisper Draw near.
Hiram Claudio
05/16/12
Such a touching and beautiful piece. I was pleasantly surprised how the concluding "Draw near" line gripped me deep within. It was like I could hear His voice. Thanks for that!
Genia Gilbert
05/17/12
These are very beautiful words. They would be somewhat depressing except for your wonderful ending of "Draw Near." Covers a range of emotions. I enjoyed it.