The Official Writing Challenge
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Oooh...this is so good. What a wonderful character so expertly introduced. Very different and refreshing read. What a picture you paint with such well-chosen words. Splendid writing.

I love the title and the verse at the end that puts this story in perspective. It's a very realistic portrayal of an abused woman. One thing confused me: Did the police take the money she saved when they delved into the flour canister the day she found them in her house, or was she reconciled to the fact that they would find her money (and assume it was his) when they started digging the next day. The fact that she lost her money is critical to the story, so I would like this to be clearer.