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By Carol Penhorwood
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It happens, oh, so rarely
We join our voice as one,
The people band together
Demanding something done.
It happens, oh, so rarely
Americans agree,
And lifting a united voice
Our freedoms we decree.
Renouncing all divisions,
United we become,
Protection for our land we claim,
For all our land, not some.
It happens, oh, so rarely
In prayer we bow our knees,
When all across the USA
We humbly come to Thee.
The day was nine eleven
When focused we became,
Attacked, we recognized our need
And called upon Your name.
Churches filled their pews,
We lived in fear and doubt,
We even ran to give our blood
To help the needy out.
But nothing's ever lasting
And now we scream and yell,
Divisions sprouting once again,
Our own agendas sell.
It happens, oh, so rarely
That we in love unite,
That we put truth and honor first
And recognize our plight.
Founded on Your values
Our country could be proud,
But peace again will not be known
'Til on our knees we've bowed.
“If my people who are called by My name shall humble themselves, pray, seek, crave and require of necessity My face, and turn from their wicked ways, then will I hear from Heaven, forgive their sin, and heal their land.” II Chronicles 7:14 (Amplified Bible)
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I felt that many of your rhymes sound forced. The use of "Thee" to rhyme sounds especially forced, when you use "Your" later on in the poem.
You've got some good lines; I like the one about our tendency to focus on selling our own agendas. May we learn to unite in love!
Heart-stirring, too; do you think we can ever learn this terribly important truth? I join you on your knees, humbly seeking the face of the Lord.
Thanks for sharing your gift once again.
Your poem brings that awful time back to the front of our minds. And it reminds us that people who have yet to find their faith in God come together in a spirit of common purpose and endeavour so rarely, yet so often in the most terrible of circumstances. That in itself suggests that God is gently trying to make His voice heard in all people. If only people would hear his voice in their normal daily lives.
Thank you for writing this.