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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Hear (07/08/10)
Lost, The Photographer and His Camera

Lost on the breezes…
cruel waves toss my boat around
winter on the sea.

My ears are attuned…
to the sounds of frozen howls
blowing through the mast.

"God, can you hear me?"
I cry to mounds of icy
foam lashing the boat.

"God, where are you now?"
I scream at the forlorn depth
where darkness prevails.

The strength of the storm…
building to a wild frenzy
engulfs all my fears.

Nature at its worst…
reveals God as powerful
and mighty in strength.

"Where is God in this?"
I agonize as frigid
waters attack me.

"Use your camera,"
is all I hear from the Lord
upon heightened swells.

I can't fight the deep…
it's too powerful to win
against such a force.

I resign the fact…
God wants me to record death
in this icy sea.

"God, did I hear right?"
I ask Him while giant waves
mount a cruel attack.

The camera's poised…
documenting my final
day on the ocean.

A noise interrupts…
the cold death toll in my soul
as the ship appears.

"How did you find me?
A needle indeed in the
proverbial hay."

Many knowing smiles…
on faces of my heroes
warm my frozen heart.

The strobe of the light…
from the camera flashed bright
through the wintry storm.
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Terry Lee
07/15/10
I'm not sure if it was intended, but this piece brought me to tears. It struck me as so relevant to events happening in my life right now, and I found it powerful, and moving.

How much more easily we could tread the rough waters of life, if we unceasingly placed our trust and faith in God!

I loved this. Thank you for writing it.

Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
07/18/10
This is a beautiful story and sounds very familiar to me. Is it perhaps based on a true story and I heard about it in the news? You did a great job showing the emotions and fears. It held my interest to the very end.
Colin Swann
07/19/10
A moving piece showing God in charge of a miraculous deliverance - Thanks - Colin
Caitlyn Meissner
07/19/10
And to think that you wrote all this using haiku. Wow! *stunned* Even with the limited format, I could still see what was going on. Good job!
Joan Campbell
07/19/10
Firstly, I'm amazed at how you came up with this story -rather courageous to take such an alternative approach! You did so very well with it too - it's creative, clever and has a very deep message too. Wow!
Amanda Brogan
07/19/10
Wow! This is such a cool piece! Sometimes we don't understand why God wants us to do something, but if we'll just listen and obey we see why in the end. Great job of showing that here!
Mona Purvis
07/20/10
What a message you developed in this format. I really love it.

Mona
Carol Slider 
07/20/10
This is such a creative, original and effective take on the topic. It's amazing what ideas one can generate with a technique like you used. Well done!
Chely Roach
07/20/10
This was very cool...what a great method you've devised! Fantastic ending!
Terry R A Eissfeldt 
07/21/10
I've always thought Haiku too short. Yeah! you took it a whole other level
Great story!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
07/21/10
Excellent job of writing a narrative poem with haiku. --good word choices.
Maria Egilsson
07/21/10
Lollie:
I went back to read this a couple of times. Each time I read, I discovered more. Sometimes what we hear Him say strikes a discordent note as His reply doesn't seem to "fit" our prayer. How aptly you portrayed how using the camera. in the middle of a violent storm at sea, is how the rescue occured.
Excellent writing and such wisdom in the message.