The Official Writing Challenge
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The last verse tripped me up a bit, but I did understand the story. Poor Operator! At least Cellphones are still useful for something, LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Oh how things have changed! Another time, another place! Kids now would have no idea what you were talking about!!
This was not a smooth read at all no cadence or meter rhyme. A nice story but for a limited audience. Anyone under 50 will not have a clue what you're speaking of.
I'm definitely over 50 and remember this era, along with party lines, etc. You have a good plot, but the poem wasn't quite rhythmic. Perhaps a re-write in prose? A cute story.
Blank verse is generally identified by a regular meter, but no end rhyme.
I did discern a pattern (cadence/meter), here (perhaps more apparent if read outloud):
/---/-/-/-/-/ (x1)
-/-/-/-/ (x6)
/---/-/-/-/-/ (x1) etc.