The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job with this resurrection story.

Since you had words left over, I would have liked to know more about your narrator. Who is he? What is is relationship to Jesus? What happened next?

Really good application of the topic word.
More, more, more! You ended too abruptly. I felt the narrator was a she, not a he, because of the woolen shawl. I kind of feel as though I was left in the dark.
I love the concept, but I agree with the previous posts that extra information would have helped.

This is a personal preference, but I also felt this might have benefitted from a present-tense telling. It had an in-the-moment feel, which I found very appealing.