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Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)
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TITLE: Heavenly Rooms or Sulfury Fumes | Previous Challenge Entry
By Charla Diehl
05/28/09 -
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“Love up close when someone cares.”
Evident in humanity,
God’s light is shining, look and see.
Ministering to each others needs
Consoling ragged hearts that bleed
Grace-filled words from tender lips
Extended arms when someone trips
Cheering up a woeful friend
Being patient at days end
Giving--expecting nothing back
Filling voids in lives that lack
Gentleness cupped in tired hands
A smile that says, “I understand”
Forgiveness that keeps no score
Guidance sought at scripture’s core
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Pleading screams and Satan’s jeers
Belch from the pit of steamy tears.
Captives in a sea of fire
Enslaved by every dark desire.
Sagging shoulders, dragging feet,
Outward signs of one’s defeat.
Hearts bound up with bitterness,
Never showing love exists.
Death that roams above the grave,
Coveting souls from Him who saves.
Tangled feelings, weathered pain
Sometimes used for hellish gain.
Liar, Liar spins and weaves
Webs that shimmer to deceive.
Traps are set with evil power
Like vultures waiting to devour.
Hearing Heaven’s gated doors
Slamming shut forevermore.
Gnawing emptiness--never fed
Eternal days of dire dread.
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A few possessive words in the first half were lacking their apostrophes. I'm curious, too, why you chose to close with the "Fumes" rather than the "Rooms".
I enjoyed this poem very much.