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What an exciting read! I was pulling for her, and was thrilled with her recovery. Wonderful story telling.
Wow, I got all tensed up reading this. Realized I was holding my breath at the end!
Nice tension and suspense here. I found myself wanting to hurry things along.
I also wanted to hit the teenage daughter over the head with the phone even though she didn't realise what was going on (poor girl).

Being an asthma sufferer, I understand the feelings of fear when you can't breathe.
I remember having asthma attacks where panic set in as I fought for air. You painted this scene well.

Well done on making the top 15. And welcome back!
Welcome back. brilliant read. Really enjoyed it. Congratson making the top Norms
Good interesting read. Welcome back!