The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting story.
I think what impressed me is that you knew your subject. You knew the terminology, characteristics for this type of bird, etc. Either you raise them and they are a passion of yours or you are thorough when it comes to research. The details were interesting and were as much a part of the story as the story itself.
What immediately struck me about this entry was that I'm glad we don't have to worry about bribery and favoritism when it comes to FaithWriters judges!
Seriously though, your passion for your subject came through well. I'm not a bird-lover and I struggled a little to connect with the emotions expressed. I think that what would have helped would have been a little more explanatory information - for instance, what criteria the judges should be looking for and why your particular birds deserved to do well. Bless you.