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Topic: Hide and Seek (08/07/08)
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TITLE: I Rowed | Previous Challenge Entry
By Loren T. Lowery
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I row.
Dark mist turns to dark rain.
Hidden and lost in its darkness;
I row.
Night stifles light
Thunder hides sound
Blind and deaf -
I row.
Winds twist bow to stern
Up is down
Right is left
Still, I row
Seeking, searching -
Neither gull nor compass to guide me
Hidden, lost in immensity;
I row.
Then trimmed lamps not veiled;
Gleams across the waves.
It is my brother’s keeping
Lights upon the shore.
Guiding, directing
Seeking vessels in the darkness -
Lost, hidden souls - tossed upon the waves,
It searches.
My vessel it found
My plight it revealed
My longing, my oars
Washed in it's gleam.
Hidden in the dark night of sin
I found the lighted shore
I rowed into the harbor
Blessed by my brother’s keeping
The lower lights to attend.
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Inspired by the words and music of "Brightly Beams our Father's Mercy" by Philip P. Bliss
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Winds twist bow to stern
Up is down
Right is left
Still, I row
I also like the reptition of "I row." Very pretty.
There are a few abstract words that could to be replaced by a concrete image, such a "plight", but it worked anyway!
I love the free verse and the depth of the poem. Great job.