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This is a great down-to-earth view of an old story. I loved to see the sister's preparing for Zipporah's wedding and how they pooled together their jewelry, those little details made this great! ^_^
Your ending is perfect. I also like a new look at an old story. This is fun and refreshing.

The balance of all elements made this work for me.
An enjoyable read. Thank you.