The Official Writing Challenge
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I was enjoying the buid-up of your suspense in the story, but I was guessing "ants." I liked the imagery you included. The nectar and the honey were a nice touch.
Have you been taking Jan's lessons? ;) It took me quite a while to figure out who the characters where - a testament to the good build up in this story. There were a few minor errors, but I really enjoyed this one!
Oh, I loved this! When I got to the end I laughed out loud! It didnt even dawn on me who you where talking about until right at the end! Wonderful!