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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)
I’m not supposed to be playing with these scissors. Hmm. Mom told me not to get them out again, but I don’t think she’d care if I use them just a little bit. My Barbie has such long, long hair, and I’d like it to be short, like Twiggy’s.

There! It’s beautiful all zig-zaggy like that! I wonder how I can give her some earrings that look real? Hey! I know! Mom has some sewing pins in her box. I saw them when I got the scissors out.

Hmmm. Here’s some red tipped ones. Oooh, those pinky looking ones are cool. I like them! Now, if I can just get them pushed into her head…oops. Too far. Now. There. They look neat with her mod boots and her little swingy coat. Uh-oh. I spilled the rest of those pins. Well… I’ll pick ‘em up when I bring the scissors back in here.

I need a car for her to ride in. Or…something...let’s see…Oh! I know! I’ll get Tom’s jeep. He won’t miss it until it’s bedtime anyway. He never plays with that GI Joe until bedtime.

She looks way cool riding in that thing. But, I think she needs a date. I’ll put GI Joe- no! I like Geronimo better. His hair is as long as the Beetles’. So, so cool. I think they’ll go on a date to the drive-in. He needs a ponytail thingee, though. Yea, that looks much better.

Oh good. Mom’s out back hanging up the wash, so I can sneak in here and let them watch TV, I mean, the movie screen.

They look so cute sitting there in front of that TV. But, I don’t want them to watch this. What is this show anyway? Those people are going to bed in the daytime! B. O. R. I. N. G.

Hey, this looks like a neato movie.

You know, they need some popcorn. I wonder how long Mom will be out there? Looks like she’s still got…yes! A whole ‘nother basket to hang. I can make the popcorn before she even comes back in.

Now, where’s that butter…and the popcorn…and the pot. Oh! Hey! Lookit that Jiffy Pop. That’ll be even cooler!

Hmmm. It says to turn on the burner, place the little fake pan on…and wait. Is it popping yet? Nope.

Lookit how many bubbles this dish soap makes! Whoa…spilled over the sink some…oh well. It’s just water. Pretty slimy, though.

Man, this popcorn is taking a long time. I better go get Barbie and Geronimo.

Hey, look! Cartoons are on. It’s Mighty Mouse, too. My favorite. I sure am glad Tom went over to Jeffrey’s today. Now he can’t call me a baby or hog the TV, either.

That show was funny. Here I come to save the daaaayyy!

Sheesh. I hate commercials.

Oh, I wish I were an Oscar Meyer weee-ner…everyone’d be in love with me…doo-ditty- doo!

Wow, that lava lamp looks so neat. Far out! I wonder if I could make one like that?

Here’s some oil, and some food coloring, and now I need something to put it in. Hey, this bottle of pop is just the right size. I’ll pour this out into the cup…oh! Rats. I spilled it on the counter. Well, here’s a towel. It looks clean. Nice and white. There.

Now. Let me see…if I pour in some oil…then some red food coloring…and then, put on the cap. Shoot! That cap flew off! Oh great. I just dumped this all over the rug. Where’s that white towel?

Well, at least the carpet isn’t too red anymore. Mostly pink in that one little spot.

Boy. That was close. Oops! I’d better check on the popcorn.

It’s smoking! What happened? Oh man. Here…this window…ugh…it’s stuck…now…that’ll take the burnt smell out.

Uh-oh. Here comes Mom.

“Hi, Mom!”

“Susie! What on earth have you…oh! What happened? Why’s this stove on…huh? And look! Look at my new towel! What did you…do…what is THAT! What is that pink stain on my carpet? And what’s that smell? I need to get the stain remover…whoa…why’s it slippery right there…for gosh sake! Ouch! What’s in the carpet? Pins! Where’d these come from…arrgh… where ARE MY SCISSORS?! Susan Marie Richardson! Get here in. NOW!”

Gee. What’s the matter with HER? Boy. She’s always screamin’ her head off. I wish she were like Amy’s mom. Amy’s mom is so…so…nice. And calm.

“Coming, Mom!”
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Janice Cartwright
09/20/07
This gives me small insight into my grand-daughter's thought processes when she smeared my $30 a jar night cream all over the kitchen floor. Did the tile have wrinkles? Was she doing it to foil possible burglars? I guess I'll never know. Cute, cute story that was fun to read and held my interest all the way through.
Jan Ackerson
09/21/07
Hilarious stream-of-consciousness...I really liked that Susie seemed to be about my age, with the Beatles, and Jiffy Pop, and so on. Great title, too.
Linda Roth
09/21/07
The title of this one is tops! Sounds like someone may have a good memory. It certainly brought back some memorable thoughts for me. Thanks!
Clyde Blakely
09/21/07
Reminds me of the time my then four-year-old daughter created a mural on her bedroom wall with crayons. My wife was really upset. I got the camera out to record this work of art, she really is talented (now 37).
Good job, enjoyed this very much. Children, aren't they precious?!

God bless and keep writing.
julie wood
09/22/07
I loved this story! I could just picture the little girl and imagine with her during her creative play. It brought back memories for me, as I remember a lot of the things in Susie's world from my own childhood--she must be about my age now!

The unusual title also drew me in and was perfect for this delightful,funny story!

Great job!
Leigh MacKelvey
09/22/07
Creative! I smiled at all the "my generation names" of things, too. I could picture the whole story, so the thoughts of the child were very well written!
Laurie Walker
09/23/07
I love that you took us so completely into her head! It all makes sense there ;)
Sheri Gordon
09/23/07
This is so creative, and very funny. I kept cringing thinking about the poor mom -- but then I'd giggle thinking about the little girl. Great voice.
Beth LaBuff
09/24/07
I love your title too. You've given us the cutest image of Barbie and Geronimo sitting in a jeep in front of the TV (drive-in movie). I can just see it. Makes me want to laugh. Your combination of dolls is so clever too.

I think you've "dated" (as in -- set in a time period) a lot of FWers, judging by the comments. This is so cute. I really enjoyed the trip back down memory lane. Oh...is this based on a true story? :) ;)
Frank Creed
09/24/07
I remember the day my sister actually did this. Glad to know I'm not the only kid trapped in an aging body. What details of both era and thought process--your brain still carry all around? What a memory!
Joy Faire Stewart
09/24/07
This is one of my favorites this week. Love the child's voice, you have captured it perfectly.
Loren T. Lowery
09/24/07
A creative insight into the real and imaginery world of a child. Our takes on this subject were very simliar this week. I truly enjoyed yours!
Joanne Sher 
09/24/07
WONDERFUL title, and wonderful stream-of-consciousness. I echo all the comments above me - too fun!
Catrina Bradley
09/25/07
I really liked this trip in to a little girl's head. Many smiles. Super job! :) Cat
Jenny Fitch
09/27/07
That was so much fun to read. Great job!
Kristen Hester
09/27/07
This is darling. I enjoyed being back in my little girl mind for a while. Great job.
c clemons
09/27/07
I'm glad this ended well, with all that she got into I feared the worse. I would have liked to see more on calm but that's just one opinion. Good writing.