The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting way of handling the in and outs. Thanks for posting.
I really, really like the writing style here--unique, non-linear, compelling.
Well done. I was left with many questions at the end, but I think that was the point, right? Unique POV.
I have so many questions at the end that I want you to write another story, as soon as you can, to let me know what happens to all these wonderful characters! Your writing is so finely tuned, I could not stop reading. This is a wonderful story, and I wish there was another chapter. I like the title, too.
I think you handled the daze of her being in and out of her trauma wonderfully. The images you wrote were very visual and I was rivited through out the story. I was surprised by the ending because I thought just her surviving would be surprising enough for all involved. Great job.
Yes, I was holding my breath while reading expecting bad news, at the same time hoping I was wrong. I'm glad everyone lived. The laptop was a surprise. Great writing and I didn't want it to end!
Vivid description in this piece that held my attention throughout. I want more!
Ah, very effective writing! I'm not quite sure why she was "the lucky one" since everyone else seemed to be mostly okay. Great story.