The Official Writing Challenge
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The whole story was really well-written, but the next-to-last paragraph is simply outstanding! You transformed that woman from a frightening, almost inhuman character to a child of God, in just a few beautifully chosen words.
Great story. Full of conflicting emotions that I could feel.

I would have liked to feel the jungle a bit more with sounds, feelings, sights.

Could have done without the rat part(hate those things). :)

Good work.
Great characterization in such few words! This is a good story with many vivid descriptions.
My jungles have been made of concrete, but I certainly understand the feelings and fears you have so well described. Well done.
Congratulations! This is a well deserved win on a well written, moving piece. Love, Angel :)
Congratulations on your highly commended. This is very good writing.