The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed reading this! Terrific dialogue and also descriptions--I especially liked the vivid verbs such as "bounded," "slid," "flopped" and "ambled." I could just see the main character--especially sliding into that swing in the opening line!

Moving message as well--the main character shows impressive maturity for a teenager. I can relate to the frustration of schedule conflicts like this--and even as an adult I often don't handle them well. This girl is a real inspiration!

The title also drew me in--I had to know about both "Jan" and her "big decision"!
This is a sacrifice any age could relate to. Great dialogue and characterization. Nice job!
Wonderful "giving" story. This would be a wonderful article for a teen's take-home paper. Maybe you should try to have it published after the challenge. Good job.
What a terrific big sister! I liked the dialouge and closeness of the family. I especially liked the character of Jan. She was realistic and understanding. Great job with this. ^_^
The message in the word "sacrifice" sums up your entire story. It is what got my attention, and I'm so glad it gave Jan God's message to her as well. Good writing, good story. I also want to say "Thank you!" for taking time to comment on my music entry. I appreciate it so much!