The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story of being thankful for things we take for granted. Very moving story!
04/25/05
Tugged at my heartstrings, you did.

Mary N
04/25/05
I like the way you were able to bring to mind an extrodinary moment while observing a seeminly ordinary one.
04/25/05
This is a delightfully engaging story. I love the little details like 'I feel my son lean against my leg.' and 'he peers through the wire diamonds' they help make the story real. The choice of first person also makes it immediate for the reader. I did not grow up with christian parents or wise parents for that matter and 'envy' in the nicest possible way. those who did. Thanks for sharing your story so well. One thing though in the first para you tell us dad's mowing the lawn and in the second you say 'stares at Grandpa mowing his lawn.'It jarred a bit with me.
04/26/05
I just received a freelance opportunity for Godsized stories. This would be perfect for it!
Darling story! Thank you for sharing your memories with us. :-)
04/27/05
Very very nice! Like the style and the polished finish. Thanks!