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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)
Life is full of questions,
Yet the answers seem to be few.
Everyone has suggestions,
But seldom do they work for you.

You probe for the deeper meaning,
But your thoughts seem to get lost.
The answer is before you gleaming,
But you don’t want to pay the cost.

God has the answer for the things you wonder,
They are found within His Holy Book.
Answers will not come in a voice of thunder,
They are simply written for you to take a look.

How much do you want fulfillment in life?
Dare you look to God to find the truth?
Do you want to give up your worry and strife?
Are you sure you want to find the proof?

Where your heart is there is your treasure,
Out of the abundance of the heart the mouth speaks.
Are filling your mind and body with selfish pleasure,
As you often find in this filling, it leaks.

The answer is not found in what you get,
But rather it is in what you give.
Jesus giving His life is the standard that is set,
Give Him yours if it is fulfillment you want to live.
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Ann Darcy
04/13/06
I won't pretend to know anything about poetry, so I have not critique or anything. I really liked this, thanks for sharing!
Jan Ackerson
04/13/06
I especially like your4th stanza: "It leaks!" Very good!

A bit more work on rhythm and meter would really polish up this little gem.
Helen Paynter
04/13/06
Good sentiments. Have a little look at your scanning and see if you can tighten it up. Thank you for sharing it
Marilyn Schnepp 
04/15/06
It wouldn't take much to make this poem flow beautifully; for instance..
"Life is full of questions
Yet the answers are so few", etc, etc;...just the lack of rhythm can make a Great poem only average. Keep up the good work! Perfection comes with practice. God Bless.