The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/06
Very moving. Quite fast moving - could it be slowed a little? But a good read, and a message of hope. Thank you.
03/12/06
Whew!! I agree slow this down some if you can, maybe it is still very painful if this is a true stoy for you to think about. But the writing it all down will help. I had to reread the last paragraph to get your point, but this is good. God bless and keep writing.
03/15/06
'Bearutifully tragic' story...except that it's not really tragic at all. I like that you describe Christ as 'his Christ' so that the reader can understand that the son is as much a witness to his father before his death as anything else that happened. Nice progression of character development...tough to put so much information/time in 750 words. Getting better every time, my friend.