The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an excellent story. The teen-age voice is just right!, and I love how she learned the meaning of the verse without being lectured. the best way to learn!
I really enjoyed this. I especially liked that an adult didn't jump in and try to resolve the conflict. I can totally relate to the young MC. My only suggestion might be to work on the dialog sounding a bit more authentic. People often speak in incomplete sentences, use slang, and vary sentence lengths. You did a great job of writing on topic and delivering a powerful message.

On the message boards and in the FW Facebook group, there's a prompt to leave a hint about your entry. This might pull more people to read it and give feedback too.