The Official Writing Challenge
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You do an awesome job telling this story. You pulled me in right away. The order seemed a bit out of place. I might've started with waking up from neighbors screams to waking children. It seems strange that the MC would know the neighbor's parents perished so quickly too. I do like how you added dialog and body language to paint a picture. Kids are so wise. I really like how the son wanted to pray Jo matter what because not only was the fire still going, but people would be afraid and grieving. I'd have really enjoyed if the prayer had been included. Many people aren't sure how to pray, so I always enjoy an example. I like your Scriptures and your message too.
Well done. Lots of action. I agree with Shann about the order of the events but you kept the pace and made every word count.
Kudos
09/15/21
I'm in agreement with both comments and I too would have delighted in reading the son's prayer.

Your entry ended with a good example of the account in Daniel. Shadrach, Meshach and Abednego coming out of the fiery furnace not smelling of smoke, and may have been a great set of scriptures to weave into your story.