The Official Writing Challenge
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05/21/21
I thoroughly enjoyed this writing. I am a stickler when it comes to punctuation. It is the evil secretary that comes out. A good punctuation tool would be good to use. Nice entry!
05/25/21
So beautiful!
I loved this, thank you.
Blessings~
You did an excellent job of retelling this story from Mary's POV. You drew me in right away and kept me to the end. I especially enjoyed the last paragraph.
05/27/21
Thoughtfully written.

I'm watching the Chosen series, so the already rich story of our Savior has been amplified as has my awe for the humanity of our Lord Christ. Your vivid entry described subtilties and moved me to reflect again this afternoon. Thank you.
05/28/21
Wow! what a fantastic "hook that made me want to read more. The word pictures you painted created vivid descriptions of the sufferings of Christ. You made it possible for the reader to be a part of the crowd.

Did you mean trail instead of trial at the end of the second paragraph? Also, watch out for run-on sentences.

Even with a few grammar issues, I can see why this won a deserving third place.

Congratulations!
05/28/21
Sometimes, even comments need a correction. ;-)

Wow! What a fantastic "hook"


















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