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09/05/19
You told this story so well. It made it all the more poignant being true. What an encouragement. Great writing.
09/05/19
Thoroughly enjoyed this story and was delighted to discover it wasn't fiction. Very well told--great descriptions of the fireworks.
09/06/19
This gave me goosebumps. So scary for anyone, especially children to have to deal with war. That was wise to show her how beautiful the noisy things could be.
09/08/19
This is an excellent read! Such a great example of finding refuge and overcoming fear. Well done!
09/08/19
This is an excellent read! Such a great example of finding refuge and overcoming fear. Well done!
09/09/19
So glad this has a happy ending. I have often wondered how refuges to our country cope with our Fourth of July fireworks.
09/10/19
Great job with the topic, and your writing! Well done
Blessings~
09/10/19
And that fact that it was true, really touched my heart.
Thank you,
Blessings~
I was impressed with your ability to evoke emotion within the reader's mind throughout the entire piece. I actually felt every emotion Fatuma felt from beginning to the end. It was a great read.
09/12/19
I loved everything about this, and like what the other said, was happy to see it was a true story. I hope we see more of what your mom has done for these people. I am sure there is a wealth of material. Great descriptive writing.
This is a great story. You pulled me in right away. I'll admit I drifted a bit with the descriptions of the fireworks, but the other parts were spectacular. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level.