The Official Writing Challenge
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10/29/16
Thank you for your submission! I can see you have laid out the many frustrations of trying to remember everything, hence, a journal is an important tool. You may want to check on a few misspelled words and some omissions. Good job!
You have a delightful, yet subtle sense of humor. I'd love to see you expand on it and go into greater depth. I have a feeling if so, you could change my smile to a chuckle. I liked your message at the end. It's quite profound.
11/01/16
The best thing about this is your authentic voice; I feel as if I know you a little bit after having read this.

However, I'd have liked a better idea of what a bullet journal is, along with some anecdotes of how yours is making your life so much better. You had lots of words to spare, so a few real-life examples would have given you even more of an opportunity to show your readers what you meant.
I have come to the place today that I can't read any more. My mind must be too tired as I can't follow the thought of this piece.