The Official Writing Challenge
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This is quite creative. I could see it almost as an analogy from when I was younger, and it was easy to stay in shape. You have a start on doing some showing, but you still have a lot of telling. For example, in the beginning, instead of telling he was an outstanding worker, show what that all looks like. Maybe he balances five boxes on one hand, looks in the mirror and says, "Jimmy, you are one handsome dude!"
You have the makings of a great story here though, and the warecreatures are fascinating. Good job.