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Topic: Like a Fish Out of Water (10/24/13)
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TITLE: Whisperings | Previous Challenge Entry
By Wesley Hesketh
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as I drift within my dreams?
Or am I just a whisper
lost in all these screams?
My sins have made me dirty;
I cannot see the Light.
Can’t tell if I’m up or down-
if I’m wrong or right?
A fish out of water is what I am
gasping for some air.
I cry out from on my knees
to a God I hope will care.
I feel an evil lurking
all around Heaven’s door.
But You calm my every fear
so they are no more.
Help me in my weakness
as I stumble all around.
Give me peace in knowing
my Savior’s what I’ve found.
I’m so glad You’re with me
I can tell You’re there .
You cleanse me of unrighteousness
You show me that You care.
I can hear Your whispers
as You’re calling out my name.
I’m swimming in Your Living water.
and will never be the same.
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A tiny bit of red ink:
Give me peace in knowing
my Savior’s what I’ve found.
In this line the word following Savior's should be "Who" ---not what--because it's referring to a person (Jesus), not a thing
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