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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hacker or Virus (computer) (12/15/11)
I cannot understand
How people can exist.
Stopping your computer
With a deadly virus.

Their hatred is alive
They love to steal your joy.
Can’t stand you happiness
A scanner they employ.

They say 27
Virus they did detect.
If you use their program
They say you will not wreck.

They attack a system
Shuts your computer down
Puts you in a program
That sends you ‘round and ‘round.

Then there are the hackers
Controlling your hard drive.
Cost you lots of money
To keep your system ‘live.

They’ll steal information
Can give a virus too.
Disrupting your system
A mess they’ll give to you.

It’s like this evilness
That causes us to sin.
It blocks the agenda.
That God is sending in.

Darkness is its weapon
It causes you to think.
Everything is alright
Pushing you to the brink.

God saves our very lives
He gives to you and me
Jesus our redeemer.
Can make that program free.

So the deadly virus
That’s messing with our minds.
He’ll erase that program
To us he is so kind.

He does love the world
He gave His only son.
If we’ll believe in Him.
He gives life one by one. *

Sin can make you sad
The stench of death is there.
There is resurrection
For us who really care.

We will be protected
Salvation that is great.
We will have forgiveness
He’ll open heaven’s gate.

* John 3:16 paraphrased
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C D Swanson 
12/29/11
What a lovely poem - flowed beautifully and contained a powerful message.

My Fav Line:
"God saves our very lives
He gives to you and me
Jesus our redeemer.
Can make that program free"

I really enjoyed this. Thanks.
God Bless~
Allison Egley 
12/30/11
Oh, I like this.

A few of the lines didn't seem to fit rhythmically with the rest of the poem.

I love the rhyming paraphrase of John 3:16!
Nancy Sullivan 
12/31/11
The enemy does attack on all sides. So thankful that God is ultimately in control of our hard drive. Good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/03/12
I liked this light-hearted rhyme with a nice message. Some of the lines seemed a bit forced but you did a nice job of staying on topic and delivering a poignant message.
Benjamin Graber
01/05/12
Great job meeting this topic! I enjoyed this poem.
Many of your rhymes sound forced. You may want to try to find more creative rhymes, or a less strict rhyming pattern.
I like the line of the virus "messing with your minds". Viruses certainly do that to us. Keep up the good work!