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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Oops (01/14/10)
In Times Of Mistake Let Us Pray

When Eve in Eden gravely erred
And ate of the tree forbidden;
Did she cry ''oops'' or "whoops" or "woops"?
Who ne'er asked pardon for her sin.

When Cain in envy slew Abel,
Which meditatively he did;
What cry of regret could offer
An apology for his deed?

When Esau sold his true birthright,
That man, profane, who lost his chance;
His cries and tears did sound like ''oops'',
Who found no place for repentance.

When Noah was drunk and naked lay
And Ham his son came in and saw;
Exclaiming ''whoops'' would not atone
For what he did; who wept not sore.

When Judas sold his Friend and Lord
And sat at eve with Him to dine;
No ''woops'' could wipe his guilt that pricked,
Who showed remorse, but not in time.

When David slept with Bethsheba
And killed her valiant husband too;
He cried not, "oops", but prayed to God,
And found mercy, whose heart was true.

In times of error or mistake,
With contrite hearts let's pray to God,
No outcry of words will e'er do;
For ''Oops'' is such a senseless word.
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Mildred Sheldon
01/22/10
Thanks for sharing this poem. All those people you spoke of from the Bible could have considered their sins as oops moments, but some of those sins in my opinion would not be consider oops moments. Keep writing and God bless.
c clemons
01/23/10
I agree with the previous commentor, to much work to try and fit some of these events in your poem as 'oops' momemts. Keep writing, practice does help.
Joan Campbell
01/25/10
I like the point of your poem that a true heart will not make excuses before God, but rather repent as David did. Thank you for sharing that!
Avigail David
01/26/10
Amen! I truly enjoyed and loved your composition! Indeed, in times of mistake: innocently or willfully, we must not cease praying- because God is holy, and we reverence Him.
God bless you in your writing for His glory and honour.

Ps 55:17 Evening, and morning, and at noon, will I pray, and cry aloud: and he shall hear my voice.

Maryknoll
Jan Ackerson
01/26/10
I agree with the premise of your poem--some sins are way too big for an 'oops'!

Suggestion: work on making your meter more consistent, for a smoother-flowing poem.

I've started a thread in the message boards specifically for Beginner and Intermediate writers, and I'd love to have you stop by. http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67

Thanks for this trip through the Old Testament!
Beth LaBuff 
01/30/10
Like people from Bible times, we all have our moments.. that old sin nature hounds us. Your title says it all, "In Times of Mistake, Let Us Pray"... Great message there!