The Official Writing Challenge
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10/29/09
I definitely felt the urgency of finding the herbs. You had some relly good descriptions.
I think I wanted to know more of the boy. I hope you add to this story. Maybe it's the beginning for your novel.Keep writing!
11/03/09
Interesting story. I hope the boy recovers from his illness!
A good story idea. More dialog and less clothing description would have made it even more enjoyable for me. You have created some interesting characters.