The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
Very well written. Those of us who've been in a waiting room could relate.
07/27/08
I like how you built the atmosphere of those in the waiting room. When doing dialog, start a new paragraph as the speaker changes. I liked the thoughtfulness and appreciation for the Ms. Hapton--they're often overlooked.