The Official Writing Challenge
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11/02/06
"Are we the priest who didn't care?" is a very good line. We are the priesthood of all believers and so few understand that. Your poem is touching. I cannot say more as I'm not talented enough to write a poem...and probably not able to critique one, either, but I know a good phrase when I read one! Keep it up!
So, so true. (it inspired a little impromptu)

"We are reflectors of His light.
The light is not our own.
And if we do our Savior right
We'll shine like polished chrome."

Also, the fourth stanza reminded me of a poem I wrote called The Beaten Man. Hmmm... I suppose I'll go dig that up and post it for you.