The Official Writing Challenge
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Ooh, a hint of romance, what fun! Beware of switches in POV and in tense. I had fun reading this one.
A nice start, you changed point of view (POV) from the mom to the son. It might be better to show the mom's frustration from the son's pov instead of changing mid-stream. But, I liked the character, liked how the son was more on the ball than the mom gave him credit :)
The POV shift was a bit confusing, but that aside, I enjoyed reading this little story.
Everyone else has said it, I will too, the POV shifts are distracting. Love the little romance - very cute.