The Official Writing Challenge
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06/03/06
Well, you really tapped into my fear of flying! I could feel every jostle and bump.

I wonder if this was intended for last week's topic of "Joy?"

Had me on the edge of my seat.

06/06/06
Good tension and characters. It needs some editing -some typos, grammar, punctuation. Also, you need a new paragraph for each speaker. Good details of the flight and the trouble in the flight -made me feel a bit nervous reading it lol.