The Official Writing Challenge
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Intriguing approach. I was a little confused at first. Good job though.
Interesting metaphors! Great writing!
03/15/06
This was a wonderful idea! To keep it in the realm of allegory, I don't think you need to reveal that the "prize" is Jesus. Your readers will figure that out, and it's got more "oomph" that way. Good job!
03/16/06
I agree with the comments above. Very intriguing, although I struggled a bit with the first 2 paragraphs - they made a lot more sense second time through. I did enjoy reading it. Thank you
03/16/06
Good use of words, although I was also confused as I read this. Interesting that he took Jesus to church, yet wouldn't speak of Him. How many do we know who do that? Nice writing overall.