The Official Writing Challenge
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I found you kinda went off in different directions. Try to stick to one main story and develop that. Interesting story though! I liked how you realted your stories back to God. Good job!
03/16/06
The chaff provides an excellent object lesson. Thanks very much for teaching me something today.
I liked how you connected chaff in the Navy to chaff in our lives. Your ending uses the words locked on quite a few times though. I think it would be more effective if you saved that phrase for the last sentence.
03/16/06
'Staying locked on..' a modern was of 'practicing the presence'? Thanks for updating the metaphor!