The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting story and made me stop and think (always a good thing). The beginning was a bit confusing to me. I wasn't sure who Margie was until the very end. One thing I'd encourage you to di is to show rather than tell. For example, how did the MC know Margie was angry? Did her fists ball up, her face turn red or perhaps she scowled? I enjoy open-ended endings. Part of me wanted more details to this interesting story, but your message is more powerful and realistic with an open ending. You have a clear message, backed by nice Bible verse choice.