The Official Writing Challenge
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You are a determined and hard worker who deserves encouragement. Thank you for your openness. We are all a work in progress. God bless you.
09/01/25
This is a refreshing piece of work. I enjoyed reading about your determination and success. I look forward to reading more of your work. Blessings.
You have an interesting testimonial. You did a nice job of writing on topic. My heart ached for the MC. You have quite a few extra words and some tightening would really help pace the story better. By adding some body language, dialog, (using contractions and slang) and thoughts you can make the story pop more. For example, you might do something like this: Squinting at the bright light, I woke up covered in puke. Groaning, I muttered, "Gross," and wobbled to the bathroom to clean up. You have a great start here for sure. You make the reader stop and think, which is always a good thing. Pretty much everyone can relate to this story in one way or another.

On the message boards and in the FW Facebook group, there's a prompt to leave a hint about this week's entries. If you're looking for more feedback, consider going to FWFB or forums and leave a hint about your title.