The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/06
Bravo! Excellent message well done. One minor glitch (I think, though I could be wrong): you've used "you" throughout except in this one sentence: "to tell me that he cares". Somehow that didn't ring true and I assumed you meant to say: "to tell me that you care" in keeping with the rest of the work. Nicely done.
02/16/06
I love the name for the Lord here, "Breaker of Bonds." That's almost a sermon in itself! Some lovely imagery here.
02/18/06
"Free Verse" (I think they call it) is not usually my cup of tea; however, the parts that I could understand were like a salve or balm for my soul. Thank you for sharing. Nicely done.
02/18/06
This poem comes from the heart. One can feel the emotion of the poet coming through in fervent prayer to the "Breaker of Bonds"