The Official Writing Challenge
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12/03/21
Truly an exhibition of being patient. Thank you for sharing a wonderful well written story.
12/05/21
Patience and prayer.

Thank you for sharing.
12/07/21
Oh my, could this story rock, because so many can relate to the care of the elderly. However, the story is almost totally telling, recounting events. Make it sparkle by showing the reader ... the shock of finding Mama on the floor ... the disgust of seeing pus on the bandages, etc. Put that reader into the scene to smell, feel, see and experience every setback and triumph. Keep writing!
The subject is so prevalent and relatable. A serious point in life touched on and shared so successfully. Made me think and feel. Thanks for writing it. One thing I had difficulty with was transition between paragraph 3 and 4 where she changes from mom to Marcia. I though mom was going to the neighbors when it was Marcia. I would use the word Marcia instead of she to start paragraph 4. To clarify. Great work!
08/25/23
This rewound my memories to 2019 when I had to get help caring for my mama, who didn't get better, but passed away just four months after becoming ill. Patience is the word. . . Thanks for sharing your story.