The Official Writing Challenge
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Date
07/26/21
You wrote- "Another merchant offered a larger rug of lesser quality for the Persian rug."

It might come across more clearly as "Another merchant offered a larger rug of lesser quality (which I considered and traded) for the Persian rug."

Something like that to clarify what was transpiring without the reader needing to go back and read again.

Other than that suggestion you wrote a good analogy on the parable of the talents.

Thank you for the reminder!