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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: ENOUGH (01/07/21)
Where’s the peace and love in our land
Fighting and rioting has gotten so out of hand
Why is it we seem to toil and turn and not get along
With tight fisted opinions that fly saying one another is wrong

God gave us the right to make our own choices
But we tend to rage on with exploding voices
Battles sometimes build between our loving family and friends
Tearing hearts and relationships to all ends

We are living in moments of so much strife
This is why we need to put God first in our life
Our battles with one another storm ugliness within our soul
Giving the devil opportunity to steal us into his deep darkened black hole

Our words should have a sensor that reveals how we make God sad
When we curse His name when we are frustrated or mad
We don’t show God respect when using His name in vain
But God’s unconditional love He will always maintain

Respecting our mothers and fathers we don’t see it as much
A gift from God was given to raise us with their loving touch
Families have fallen apart and don’t reach out anymore
Or staying connected seems to be a troublesome chore

With all the hate and killing that has been done to our human kind
How hasn’t God given up on us and resigned
God so loved the world He died for our sins
That is a true fact and not a might of been

These are only a few, of God’s rules, to guide us
We should take them wholeheartedly as a bonus plus, plus
Our relationships upon this earth can be gone in a blink of an eye
Losing chances to share life, love, and stories before we say goodbye

God gave us His 10 commandments to live by and stand
And lift our hands and pray for what God has set forth & planned
I’m sure if we listen closely to His whispers of love when things are rough
He’ll show us Our Almighty Father is there...isn’t that ENOUGH!!
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Linda Lawrence 
01/14/21
Quite well said!
Ruthie Alekseeva
01/15/21
This is a well written poem. I like that it has a message in it (lots of poems are just descriptions of objects or emotions, and that the message doesn't sound as if it has been forced into the poem.

You manage to make the reader feel angst at the beginning of the poem and then hope by the end of it. I can't see anything that would improve what you have already written :)
Marlene Custer 
01/16/21
A timely poem. Well done!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/18/21
This is quite powerful. It takes the reader on an artistic journey. Poetry is my weakest genre, but it seems to flow and the rhymes are delightful. I noticed two tiny things that are grammatical not poetical. In the third from last stanza, you use might of. This is a common mistake, but it should be might have or might've. Although I'm tone deaf so can't be sure, but to my ears I don't think that change would mess your rhythm. Another tiny thing is most experts don't agree about how high to write out numerals, but almost all say to at least ten (10 vs ten). In my opinion, in poetry especially, it's more pleasing to eye to write it out. Those are all insignificant things though and don't change the powerful and fitting message that is spot on topic too.

https://stancarey.wordpress.com/2012/10/23/would-of-could-of-might-of-must-of/