The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 347 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
11/27/20
So true that we are fearfully and wonderfully made!
This is a great piece. You add some great thoughts and descriptions. Although quite a few people focused on these verses this week, you did a fine job of expanding on it and making it fresher. When I first joined FW, I was told to write down the first 5 ideas I had when I heard the topic, but then throw those ideas away because they are probably like everyone's. However, if you feel God pulling you in that direction, try to do it in a way that's different. For example, perhaps from an angel's POV (although that's not super original either). A bit farther out of box would be from the apple tree's POV (although that could easily become too far out of box). You've done a good job of tackling these verses in a slightly different way. I really like the way you described the body coming to life and reacting to God's breath. I've never thought of that, and it's intriguing to me to picture it. One of the hardest things, in my opinion, is a strong ending. Try to avoid phrases like In conclusion. I think it would have been a more powerful ending if you stopped at He's our breath and spirit. You've done such a great job of laying out your message, you don't need to tell the reader the point again. You've so much talent. A piece like this really makes me think and that's a hard thing to be able to do. Although Jan isn't active in FW anymore, there's a section on the message boards (Jan's Writing Basics) that goes into more detail. While she probably won't answer if you have questions, it's possible others might reach instead. Here's a link to that thread on our forums:
https://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67
Keep writing. You are talented and your passion is quite clear!