The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/20
Wow - I feel for you. I am so sorry you experienced that.

My favourite line: The school year passed like a snail on a turtle's back.
That was so descriptive!

One thing - you mention, "One snarled, wearing all black with an aggressive expression on his face." The phrase, 'on his face' is redundant. Where else would that expression be?

Then later on you put your thoughts in inverted commas, but don't do two lines down.

A strong entry, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
01/31/20

You painted a beautiful picture with your words. And there truly is power in selecting the perfect word or words.
Good job, you told a very personal and yet meaningful story. In the first chapter of Joshua, we are told multiple times to be. ' Be Strong and Courageous." You are both Bravo.
02/01/20
Oh, that must have been tough, but God knew.