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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: HOME (02/07/19)
John Parker was a tall, lean, athletic machine. He was good-looking with a chiseled face and wavy black hair. He was a mix of German and Italian heritage. As a tennis player, his height and excellent stamina gave him a decided advantage over most middle-aged players.

After an efficient workout with the ball machine, John was relaxing upstairs at the Midtown Racquet Club.

He heard a calm, authoritative voice, “Take your shoes and your smelly socks off. For you’re on holy ground.”

Startled and looking around to see who was joking with him, he said out loud with a smirk, “Yeah, right. I’ve got to cut back on my caffeine intake.”

“John, I prefer not to tell you twice.”

This time the voice was louder and more resolute. John flashed back to the memory of his father talking to him. He knew what that tone of voice meant. John immediately pulled off his footwear while hoping no one was watching.

“John, I choose you as My son. I want to live in you for the rest of your life and for eternity.”

“I have an issue with long-term commitments. My marriage didn’t turn out too well, as I’m sure you’re aware.”

An evil voice hissed in his ear, “You’re not good enough to be one of his. You weren’t even adequate as a husband.”

“John, I have made you in My image, and I choose to make My home in you. The ball is in your court.”

“How in the world can I live a Christian life? After all my failures, you want me on your team?”

“Trust me. You may not be an all-star, but you’re not the worst person I’ve dealt with.”

The evil genius said with a venomous tone, “Remember what you said to your ex-wife. What kind of man would say that?”

“Don’t worry about what he says. You’re just a man in need of My grace like everyone else. What do you say to My offer?”

Feeling the warmth of God‘s loving presence, John’s heart softened. “What exactly do I have to do?”

“Read the first chapter of the book of John a few times, and we’ll talk again. This is the start of a good long-term relationship.”


Scripture: John 14:20
“And that day you will know that I am in my Father, and you in me, and I in you.”
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C D Swanson 
02/14/19
Great job with the topic in this well written entry.
I really enjoyed it.
Thank you.
Blessings~
Barbara Culler 
02/15/19
Interesting take on the topic. I wonder if God really does speak with some people this way?
Corinne Smelker 
02/19/19
A person asked whether God actually does talk to people like that. I can attest that He does. I heard the voice of God audibly when I was 13. I was in a meeting with a hundred other people, and I thought someone was interrupting the speaker and I looked to see who it was. But no one else seemed bothered by it. I even asked the person next to me if they heard what I had heard - and they looked at me strangely. Three times I heard, "Are you saved?" Long story short - after 3 hours of wrestling with myself and convincing myself that I was not insane, I got saved!
Sue Gallien
02/19/19
Unexpected take on the theme. I like the creative, modern approach. Thoroughly enjoyed the way you utilized language and imagery. Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/19/19
This is powerful. The story made me think of the angel on one shoulder and devil on other. I really enjoyed the juxtaposition. The beginning dragged a tiny bit for me. One way to fix that would be to sprinkle some of the back story throughout the story. I also would have loved to see some body language or thoughts in italics to break up the dialog just a wee bit more. I also can attest that God does speak to people like this. It's a pretty amazing experience and you've done a great job. This is one of my favorites that I've read this far.
Betty Castleberry
02/21/19
Very creative piece. Nice descriptions. Thank you for sharing.
Nancy Sullivan 
02/21/19
You show that the battle for our souls is real. Congratulations on your HC and your great writing.