The Official Writing Challenge
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06/16/16
I'm glad Jake found Jesus. God bless all those who minister to the homeless. Good writing. God bless.
06/17/16
Excellent. We get a good picture of Jake. The suspense was built as it moved along. A couple of tiny issues that could be typos. In one place you mixed up your and you're and in another is there ..words when it should have been are. I thought you could do without the last paragraph.
I minister to the homeless as a church secretary and this made me teary. I read and agree with Pat's comment about the last paragraph, and I also think you could delete the first sentence, and "yet" in the 2nd. You don't need to tell us he looked like the other homeless but was different and then also show us. There are other places where you tell us things you could show us, too. Aside from the technical stuff, this is EXCELLENT.
06/22/16
This was powerful in content and delivery. Well done!

Blessings~
06/23/16
Congrats!

Blessings~
06/25/16
Congratulations on 3rd Place, Level 2.