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Excellent summation of envy and jealousy in this piece. You've packed quite a wallop of truths into this well written story.

Well done!

God bless~
This is a chilling portrayal of how Satan infiltrates the body. I have caught myself flirting with such thoughts at times.
I love the end where the master manipulator begins to strategize her next church conquest. I only found a couple minor fixes that need to be addressed. If you read over carefully you will spot them too.
I loved the way you developed the characters. Your opening line was a great hook and pulled me right in. You may want to put your thoughts in italics instead of the single quotes. It'll stand out more. You certainly nailed the topic. I also liked that your MC didn't learn her lesson. It would have tied up the story too neatly. This way it really shows how decimating envy can be. Nice job.
An example of why some people call envy one of the "deadly sins" along with gossip.

Well developed plot and characters.

Just please don't teach us how to do it.

God BLess~