The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/05
I'm not sur if 'moreover' is common for you but I found it a little distracting in this really good story. I liked the characters and it brought back good memories. Keep writing!:)
11/26/05
Shaping lives. Enjoyed reading your story--good from beginning to end. God bless ya, littlelight